Keskarel update: A new scene by Chris Arthur-Henly Robinson

Christopher Robinson                                       Tue, May 24, 2011 at 10:51 AM 

To: keskarel navapeac <keskarel@gmail.com> 

Sylvia, I cannot see this scene working unless it is in a crowded café,

so I shall write it as such. I was thinking of Chaplin when I wrote

this. I love the idea of  K falling all over herself as she vies for

V’s attention. If we could get extras, which I know we can, this would

be great scene. I have to work on Saturday, at one, but I have Sunday

off and will be available all day. I should have the next scene

written by than. If you want to meet on Saturday morning and have a

brief story conference then shot on Sunday that would be okay with me

too.

a.      V is standing in line, she is second from the first person in line

(Wide shot) Zoom in on V as she hears the door open and turns around.

b.      Wide shot of K as she walk in,

c.      Close up V as she twist her head, so she is looking straight

forward and mouths something to her self.

d.      Medium wide shot of K as she recognizes V in line. She jumps up and

down and calls out V’s name, but V does not respond.

e.      Pan in; close up of V as she again mumbles something profane to herself.

f.      Medium shot of K as she attempts to walk up to V, but there are

many obstacles in her way.

g.      Pan out, wide shot with the hand held, K tries to walk to the left,

but she bumps into someone with a drink. She apologizes.

h.      Wide shot with the handheld of K as she goes to her right and

knocks over a display. After it is knocked over K tries to rearrange

it.

i.      Close up of V watching her and giggling to herself.

j.      Right slight medium aerial shot of V moving to the front of the

line and ordering.

k.      Medium shot with the hand held of K as she sets the last item of

the display back. She gets up and goes to the back of the line again.

(If this were ideal it would have to have grown significantly longer,

but one or two people would be fine)

l.      Medium shot of V as she picks up her drink; we follow her with the

hand held until she sits at her table, opens a paper and laughs.

K stands in line for a prolonged amount of time and V ignores her. We

see K next with her drink in hand.

a.      Medium shot of K with the hand held as we follow her trying again

to make her way to V and once again she is met by many obstacles. She

bumps into a patron then another display.

b.      Medium close up of V as she watches.

c.      Medium hand held mid body shot of K as she bumps into tables, then

another customer.

d.      Medium close up of K as she calls out V’s name again.

e.      Medium close up of K as we hear her name being called. She takes a

deep breath and rotates her body so that she is looking out the

window.

f.      Extreme close up of the back of her head while we see what she sees

out the window.

g.      Medium shot of K with the hand held as she reserves herself to

sitting down at a table away from V.

h.      Wide shot of V as she gets up, we follow her with the camera

(medium shot) as she puts her dish away.

i.      Medium shot of K sitting down and waving.

j.      Pan back to V with the handheld as she keeps her eyes fixed in

front of her with a crocked grin on her face, we follow her until she

is at the front door.

k.      Pan back to K (medium shot) who decides she needs to get up. Fade

out, wide shot of her with the hand held as she gets up and grabs her

things. She stumbles around and tries to catch V, drink in hand. The

last thing we see is K as she spills her drink all over herself and we

hear the bells as the front door closes.

END SCENE.