Hi Sylvia, I had a lot of dreams last night, woke up at six thirty had brunch with my wife and got to work. So this would be a combination of the many things we have discussed for our project. I hope you enjoy the beats. I figure we need two more scenes after these three. For the next scene I would like a beat where V convinces K to go back to her husband, K says something like, “I want to go to the beach first, it is the place where I think best, the place that gives me strength.” V agrees then the two get lost and do not end up making it back to Nima’s. In the final scene V can say something about a surprise she has for K, K say’s, “I love surprises,” and the two can take the bus back towards Nima’s. Along the way V convinces K to go back home. I would like to improvise the meeting between Nima and K; I would like to show K waiting by the steps for him. He comes in sees K invites her in, they talk, things happen and our movie ends. I would like the grocery store scene to be improvised, but we should meet up and together we can make the prompts. We can also think of more scenes if needed. I will write the last scenes by the end of the week so they will be ready for our next meeting. The final thing: I would like to watch the movie with you. I’m good at sequencing things so we can develop an outline together quickly, I want to do it as fast as possible because if we harp on it for to long it won’t be as good I don’t know if that is true, but I would like to think it was. I am tired of writing so I will stop I hope you have a great forth of July I will see you soon.
The Fight:
(Long shot of K lying on a couch in a snuggy or something comparable fade into a medium shot of her eating a tub of pop-corn, we hear her husband walk through the door. We pan around the room (aerial shot of the room) there is laundry, cups and food wrappers strewn across the floor. Back to Medium shot of K as she watches her television, preferably Russian soaps which we show then switch back to K. K waves when Nima walks in. We switch to a wide shot of K as he blocks the television when he greets her. Medium shot of K as she asks him to get out of the way. Switch to N as he moves to the right. Hand held medium shot as we watch N pace around the room, he exudes exasperated sighs, masculine moans, ECT. Long shot of N as walks in front of the front of the television. Medium shot of K as she waves her hand to shoe him away. Long shot of Nima fade into a Medium shot as he stares at her and says:
a. “You are…” Pan back to K who is looking on with wide eyes, pensively. Back to Nima hand held medium shot—“You’re a disappoint, a total…complete and total, disappointment.” Pan to K (long shot) as she crawls into a ball. b. Medium mid body shot of Nima as we watch him say, “When we first met— when I asked you to marry you, I would have never imagined you would be like you are now...” c. Medium shot of K as she curls up into a tighter ball. We follow Nima with the hand held as he paces around again, pulling at his hair. We circle around the two, long shot as K responds, “I like our life very much.” d. We circle around Nima as he looks back at her, chuckles and says, “Our life, our life… maybe it’s good for you…but me, (he points to himself and then hits his chest) it’s not good for me at all. He mutters to himself, “Its not good for me not even a little bit. e. Switch back to K Medium shot of K who is sobbing quietly. f. Back to Nima Long shot with the hand held as he looks out the window, We go into a medium shot circling around him as he goes on, “I thought I was the luckiest guy in the world when I met you,” he looks back at K then out the window again. “I really did I called my parents and told them so. I smiled a lot more then and now I…” g. Pan back to medium shot of K fade into a close up of her face as she say’s, “Stop saying this please I do not like when you are mean.” h. Back to Nima medium shot, “If you don’t want me to be mean, don’t be such a disappointment—you don’t do anything, ever. What happen to your…” He raises his hands in the air. “You know what it really doesn’t matter what I say, your impossible.” i. Medium shot of K as she uncurls herself and sits up, “I will try harder I promise.” j. Pan back to Nima, hand held medium shot as he sighs and say’s. “I’m so frustrated with you,” he points at the dinner table and mutters, “No dinner.” Points at the laundry. “No clean clothes.” We circle around him hand held medium shot. “You haven’t worked in over a year—you’re not trying to get any sort of sustainable work.” k. Pan back to K medium shot as she whispers, “I try I promise you it is very hard.” l. Back to Nima close up of his face. “I never imagined our life would be like this when we got married.” m. Back to K close up of her face as she replies, “I will try harder I promise, don’t be angry with me.” n. We circle around the two with the hand held, long shot, Nima looks at her, then back out the window and sighs. While he is looking out the window he says, “I had such big dreams when I was a child such big dreams and now look at me, I live like a good dam vagrant. For God sakes don’t you have any pride? My parents would roll over in their graves if they were dead.” o. Pan to K, medium shot, she is sobbing, “I will try harder I promise.” Long shot of K as she watches Nima collect his things then leave. “When will you be back? K yells; we hear him yell back as we fade into an extreme close up of K, “I’ll come back when you’re not such a disappointment. When you realize how lucky you are to have me.” Stay on K’s face as she weeps, “But don’t you think you are lucky to have me.”
There is no response fade out end of beat.
K and V go to the Laundromat:
Hand held long shot of V and K as V watches K with her camera trying to put her laundry in the machine, she has a difficult time (add in some slapstick) V watches the only way she can, in absolute disgust, we get a extreme close up of her face then pan back out to a handheld medium shot of the two. Once K has persevered we do a POV of K as she attempts to put a nickel into the washer instead of a quarter with no success. After she tries to jam it into the machine we pan into a close up of V as she reaches for K’s hand, with her free hand, stay in a close up of the coin, pan out medium hand held close of V as she looks at the coin and ask,
a. Pan out circle around the two, medium shot, as V say’s with her camera held up, “You’re using the wrong coin—I mean do you realize that? You need a quarter. Do you have a quarter?” b. We are still circling around the two, medium shot, with the hand held as K looks at her nickel and responds with “Isn’t this a quarter?” c. “It is not working so it isn’t a quarter—you need a quarter—that’s twenty five cents—here we use different coins for different things I know they have that where you come from to. What do you call your money anyways?” d. Rubbles. e. “Yes rubbles”; we are circling around K and V with the hand held incase you forgot. f. “We do.” K says with a smile, “We have many different coins for many different things in Russia.” g. “So use the right dam coins.” h. Close up of K’s pocket as she pulls a series of coins out. First a dime, pan out, medium shot as she asks, “Is this the right one?” Pan over to V, close up of her face, V shakes her head “Does that look like it’s the right one. I mean look how small it is for God’s sake. i. Pan back out circling around the two with the hand held, medium shot, as K shrugs her shoulders and say’s “I don’t know.” K pulls another coin out. V shakes her head, she lugs out another and this time she’s got it right. Close up POV as K puts it in. Medium shot of K as she watches V do her laundry. V sits down and we pan out to a medium shot of the two we keep the camera there for the duration of the scene as the machines are clanking away. j. V looks over at K who is following along the words with her index finger we do a close up of this and then pan out as V asks, “How did you ever learn to get along in Russia? I mean it is like you can’t do anything right and then you have the strange thing going on with your husband—you really are one of the weirdest people I have ever met.” k. K puts the magazine down. She is compelled by the same kind of anger she was the day of the infamous chicken incident with her husband. “Why do you always say stuff like this to me?” Is it that you do not think I feel because I am from another country—because I have feelings?” l. V giggles. “No I talk to you the same way I talk to everyone else, if you do not like it you can go home.” m. “But I have laundry in the machine I cannot go home.” n. V sets her camera down in here lap, she does this with out knowing why, her voice gets a little less shrill when she say’s, “I’m sorry okay. I just don’t know why you’re here with me and not home with your husband.” o. K looks down at the ground and mumbles, “I cannot go back home.” p. “Well you can’t go on hiding from your husband, don’t you remember till death do you part.” Close up of V as she raises K’s head up with her finger and the two look in each others eyes. Pan back out medium shot as V say’s “I know most people don’t take the vow seriously, but I know it means something to you, because you’re a better person than most people I have met.” q. K shakes her head yes. “It means a great deal to me.” r. V looks down at her camera and strokes it she almost picks it up, instead she puts her hands on K’s shoulder and says, “Than why in the hell did you leave.” s. (K) “I can’t tell you.” “Why” I cannot.” “Why?” “Because I am—I was a very bad wife and it is embarrassing.” “You can’t be that bad.” V examines K’s face, “Yeah you probably were.” Close up of K’s face as she giggles. t. K rubs the pages of the magazine as silence creeps up on the two. After the pause we go into an extreme close up of K’s mouth as she whispers “I almost killed my husband.” Pan out as V and K stare at each other. K huffs and puffs then says, “I had never done anything violent until that day, but hit him until he fell down and did not move anymore. I thought he died and then I saw him again that day—do you remember?” u. How could I forget?” v. K smiles and say’s, “I thought about going back long and hard, but I cannot bring myself to do this.” w. K picks up the magazine and puts it over her eyes. V looks at her and then picks up her camera off her lap and points it out of the window and say’s, “If he is still alive, it isn’t murder so go back.” x. We circle around the two medium hand held shot as K say’s, “You…” K say’s with a smile on her face, “Your camera was down—on your lap the whole time. I’ve never seen it down before, you put camera in your lap when I was talking to you. y. “I did not” z. “You did,” K says again with a smile on her face. “I did not.” V says nudging her friend.
Fade out End of Laundry Beat.
The Mustang Scene—
Wide shot of V as she finds K hiding behind a terrace, peaking around its edges watching the back of a man, as he walks away.
a. Pan in, medium mid body shot of V as she asks “What in the hell are you doing? b. Medium mid body shot of, K, “I am hiding.” c. Switch, “From who?” d. Close up of K’s face as she say’s. “My husband.” e. Switch, “But he’s walking away from you.” Pan out. “I don’t know why you are hiding from him and I don’t know if I care, but you don’t need to hide now he’s gone—there is really nothing about you that I understand.” f. Switch, “We need to hide again.” g. Switch “You are hiding.” Pan out, long shot as V takes K’s arm. (We keep original footage or we film it again. I really enjoyed the dialogue in this scene so I would like to match it up to the original if we were to shot it again.) Long shot as they peek around the corner and don’t see anything then they go and hide behind a mustang; long shot into a close up of them looking behind the window of the Mustang. h. Long shot into a medium shot of the two crotched behind the car. V looks at K and sighs “What did your husband do to you?” i. Close up of K as she looks down at the ground. j. Medium hand held shot as we do a kind of half circle around the two as they have their discourse. V asks “Did your husband beat you or something?” K shakes her head and then V says “I think violence is the worst thing a man can ever do to a woman that is why I would never let it happen to me.” “Was he mean to you?” k. K doesn’t answer. The two stare at each other and K say’s “Sometimes, but not all the time.” l. “Did he call you names or something?” “Sometimes, but not always. K whispers “Sometimes he said I was a…a…a…disappointment.” m. V begins to laugh, then says, “All men think women are disappointments, unless they are just like their mother’s.” n. Pan in to close up of V’s face as she states, “I met his mother once and she was like me, maybe that is why he did not like me? o. Pan out to medium shot of the two, “There’s something else.” r. K shakes her head emphatically “No there is not nothing else I just wanted him to be happy. I wanted me to be happy. I want you to be happy, but no one is happy and I force myself to suffer alone until I know I am happy and I can make him happy.” s. Close up of K, “No one should do that honey—I mean no one should live their life like that.” t. Close up of K’s face as she smiles. “Why do you call me honey? I have never heard this?” u. Pan out, medium shot, “Because you are sweet.” K points the camera right in K’s eyes she has been holding it up this whole conversation. “There is more to a woman than her husband. A lot of woman don’t know that.” v. “You called me honey. That is the nicest thing you have ever said to me.” w. Long shot of the two laughing. “And it was the nicest thing I will ever say to you K. Come on this is stupid hiding out here.” y. Stay in the long shot as V grabs K’s arm. Follow the two from behind as they walk back into the apartment, the shuts and we fade out, end of Mustang beat. |
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